Many tears make the pool
The pool of insanity
Which holds the empty
and the soulless in its grip
It feeds off of my blood
Which rolls drop by drop
From my wrist
Into its open abyss
The pain which dwells in me
Comes out through my lips
Making the pool’s mixture
A black toxin
So much hatred running deep
From my fingertips, which skim the water
makes the pool
deathly addictive to drink from
And I drink from it daily
Cupping my hands greedily
For my thirst is unquenchable
And my pain is unceasing
This is a poem that I like...to some degree. But it just doesn't capture the gothic picture of a girl leaning over the pool, like, addicted to it. How can I make it more effective?
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