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I loved this. I especially loved the romantic aspect of it. You really showed her love for Edward and vice versa. I did spot one grammatical mistake though:

Edward looked at me his face full of agony as if even saying the words were too painful for him.

You need to put a comma after me and another one after agony. Otherwise, this was a really good fanfic. Definitely try and write more like this.

That was really good.