You managed to write in Stephanie Meyer's style so well, I felt like it could actually be a part of the series.
Lisa
Sela Locke wrote:Well, well, well. Another TwiFanfic.
Now, I'm going to try and not be biased, because if there's one book I dislike above all else, or one author, it would be Twilight, and Steph Meyer.
She destroys the very ground rules of actual vampires. She looks an utter fool, trying to make a dead person fall in love, and smears some thick cliche icing over everything.
Anyhow, enough ranting.
I didn't see any major punctuation/spelling mistakes. I think these would be more potent if it wasn't Ella and Bedward - Yes, that was on purpose. It's extremely true, if you think about it - but even so, the idea, if slightly sappy, was well-written and wrapped up great. I think if you wrote any original Romance it would rock, but with Bedward here, it's well-madeness pales considerably.
Anyhow, good luck with your writing, and I hope you find yourself soon somewhere very, very far away from the vampire-destroyer, Miz Meyer. Find your style, find your characters!
Yes, yes. So long, fellowriter.
-SELA
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