This was okay with decent descriptions, but it didn't seem to have much point. And I don't think a jedi, or former jedi, would encourage people to try using his lightsaber. Especially when that person doesn't really want to try it.
Trying to get to heaven without Jesus is like climbing to the summit of Mount Everest naked. You die before it happens.
Hey Stori! Keep it up! I was really into the story! I felt like I was there. Yet, you should explain what the cat lady did. For people like me, who don't know about star wars, explain it a little bit more, or at the end put: 'for unfamiliar Star Wars people' and tell what it's about. Hope I helped! TTT:)
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