Dreaming of you

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I still dream of you.
I still dream of us.
I still remember of the day,you said you loved me.
I still remember you death,Anakin.
I still dream of what could of been.
I still dream of what should of been ,our family.
I still dream you,Anakin Solo.
I still can hear you voice and I'll remember it always.
Last edited by EstelPax on Sat Apr 28, 2007 7:36 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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The repetitiveness kind of took away from the poem and I would also suggest altering the last line. Other than that, there's a good theme here and some potential from the way I see it.
when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.



Teach a man to fish, he eats for a day. Don't teach a man to fish, you eat for a day. He's a grown man. Fishing's not that hard.
— Ron Swanson (Parks and Rec)