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In my novel there is a character that is very troubled. She has no real friends but she still has parties at her house and kids do come because she has rich parents and they just want to take advantage of the girl. The parties take pace when her parents are out at meetings and other callings, they're out at least once per week for extended periods of time. Sometimes they have to go out of town. Since their home has a good security system they feel it's safe to leave their daughter home alone for a while. Little do they know what she does behind their backs.
Anyway, the girl doesn't just have the parties at her house she joins them and does all the misconduct that goes on, because she wants to feel like she is a part of a group. She is a very smart girl but she makes stupid decisions and even graver ones when she gets drunk.
At one of her parties she loses her virginity at the age of fourteen. She finds that she likes the sensation and seeks out guys to have more sex. She uses it as a means to momentarily quench the emptiness and unwantedness that she feels from her peers at school. And after she does these things she feels dirty and perverted. Eventually she stops, and she feels urges to go back to that life style because in a way she became addicted to it.
Outside the parties her so called "friends" hardly ever acknowledge her. Naturally that is her cue that they are only using her. But for a while she is too afraid to say anything about it because she is afraid of being all alone again.
So the girl tells the kids that were only posing as being her friend that she will have no more parties at her house. They don't really care and just blow the matter away. Later those "friends" of her spread the word of all the things that she did. She becomes depressed and suicidal, she cuts herself at times to. People I need advice on how to make this concept sound believable and not too outlandish.
That's only for one of the five characters in my book, but the others aren't close to as bad off as her.

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Anyways:

It sounds mostly fine to me as is. The only thing I'm not sure about is how she could have so many parties (and so interact with many people on a regular basis) yet not have any friends. I just don't see how this is physically possible - if you interact with people, you inevitably get friends.

You could have her feel as though she has no friends, though, even though she actually does. That would get around the problem, and add a new dimension to the character: she could constantly think that the friends don't want to be around her, that they are only using her for her house, that they don't really like her - but in reality, they actually do like her.

If one (or more) of the other five characters in the book happen to be her friend/s, and you show from their POV that they consider the Troubled Teen Girl to be a really good, close friend, that would add a level of dramatic irony. Troubled Teen Girl can be all fretting about how the other characters don't like her, and then you can show through the other characters' POV that they do like her.

This would also make the Troubled Teen Girl's self destructive behaviour all the more tragic, because she has no reason to behave in that self destructive manner.

This would of course mean that the friends do care that the Troubled Teen Girl doesn't want to have any more parties/doesn't want to socialise with them any more - but that's not a problem, because their sadness at being jilted by their friend could explain why they then start spreading the stories of what she has been up to.

Regarding the sex:

Don't have her feel dirty and perverted during the sex. Have her feel dirty and perverted after it. Much more realistic that way, I think.

The only other comment I want to make is:

I'm not feeling the whole 'gets depressed, starts cutting herself' thing. That's been done many, many times already. You might want to replace that with something else, perhaps. Not too sure what, though.

Thanks, yeah I did think the cutting was a cliched idea. And it's true what you are saying it really is hard to think of an alternate to using that. Hm, I be sure and brainstorm on that.

Can I suggest an alternative to the 'cutting herself' idea?

She starts taking anti-depressants, or perhaps sleeping pills as she can't get to sleep because all her worries come back to her at night. She begins to take an even greater dosage when someone suggests that she's pregnant/people begin to whisper behind her back. Her parents don't notice the pills because she dumps the empty cartons in rubbish bins outside her house. She then begins to take massive doses as the worry increases, until eventually, she falls into either a coma or dies, depending on whether you want her to live or not.

I have already included the pregnant thing into my story. Only she isn't sure at first, because she is very sure that she took every precaution to prevent it. And all she could find in her parents room was condoms and birth control pills, but she could not find the place where her mom keeps her pregnancy testing strips. And she would not dare buy them on her own or ask her fellow party going peers.
Her last period was sometime before her last time that she had sex so it would be a while before she found out by a missed period. But, one morning she wakes up and the breakfast that her mother has prepared for her smells foul and tastes off to her. She says that she isn't hungry and just leaves the food promising her mother that she will eat breakfast in school if she gets hungry later.
The story takes place in the space of one day where she is fearing the possibility that she is pregnant, she finds abortion creeps in her mind. Though like her her parents are atheist they still have a problem with abortion, especially her mother who thinks that the new generation is the one to make a difference in politics revolving around doing something about the increased amount of pollution in the air. Her parents are both Field Biologists and her mother in particular attacks the public and politicians with her opinions. For this reason kids in school see her as a freak child being the daughter of a crazy Tree hugger.
Hm, you had an interesting point with the pills. I had already incorporated that she had trouble sleeping. She only got between three and four hours of sleep per night. But the pills would take away the element that she was a grump to her parents because she was always in a bad mood over lack of sleep. She often tells her mother to shut up when they get into heated arguments. All in all thanks for the feedback. More comments are welcome, I could use all the advice I could.