I am writing a story currently about a grown female who revisits an abandoned orphanage that she lived in for the first tens years of her life, but it was shut down then because of murder and rape accusations. She is touring the old building with her boyfriend who lived there as well, but for only five years. She tells him about the horror stories that she has relived many times in her own head.
I just can't get the emotion to be there. It's really lacking. I mean she's suppose to be mad, sad, confused, and i just can't seem to put it in the story. Well with out saying she was mad, and so on. So i need help please.
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Thanks, this is the big piece I am working on tell me what ya think
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Here is the second chapter to my story
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