Little Tiny Tim Christmas blesses everyone… Christmas? Maybe fire and the logs, fire and the boiler… Boiler is overheating, boiler steam air gas hot crushed skull… Crushed skull and head no longer father father is that you? Father father danny danny tony and tony again red rum mmmm… delicious and satisfying red rum red rum red rum redrum drumrum redrum MURDER
This is a paragraph from a short piece I am currently writing. This is meant to be a 'train of thought' for a character, and does it seem fine? Please comment and help me on this.
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