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a poem..or a story?



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Tue Apr 28, 2009 4:29 pm
telle_04 says...



some time ago, my classmate, martin, wanted me to make him a long narrative poetry which i understand to be an epic. he wants it to be in rhythm, four lines per stanza, and he wanted a love story centered.
here's the plot which we talked about:

Argel is a perfect prince with an imperfect fate. in a few years, he will soon take over the throne, and his father insisted on choosing the fairest princesses throughout the land to marry him. but the queen reminds him of a prophecy set upon the boy when he was born. the prophecy states that, "the maiden he loves will cause him miserable death".

Ciriah, on the other hand is a fair princess who turned down all her suitors because she loves being a huntress more than just following her parents into marrying and being a queen. she crosses paths with argel when she decided to run away from her parents.

where did argel's prophecy came from?
well, some LONG time ago, when the heavens are ruled by a supreme god, some dark and ancient secret was made, and the only witnesses are tiny dust fairies. what happened was that the god killed his queen when he suspected her of treason and unfaithfulness. no one knew, except the fairies, and they hid it until the twin infants of the god were grown up.

the twin infants, Jehru and Sheira, knew nothing of their mother's death because their father told them that she drowned and died. not until prince Jehru's coronation did the fairies broke their silence and told the truth. in anger, Jehru made his father imprisoned forever, and made a prophecy that when the two moons aligned together, a male ruler will be born carrying the curse that he will die in the hands of a maiden, just as their mother died in the arms of their father.

soon, Argel realizes his fate, and he decides to cross the boundary between their world and that of the divine rulers, determined to talk to king Jehru. with the help of Ciriah, who became his companion, together they travel and cross paths with magical beings--some intended to help them and some intended to harm them.

and if Argel's lucky, he might find love along the way..


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so what do you guys think?.i've started some stanzas, but i get bored limiting the lines and adding rhythm.will it be perfect for a story?

i'll gladly appreciate suggestions.thank you.
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Tue Apr 28, 2009 10:44 pm
Kale says...



Well, narrative poems are stories, the only difference being they are in verse. I've found that writing out narrative poems first as stories makes it easier to write the poem. If you want to write it out in story form, that's fine; it just sounds to me like you've promised to write the poem for your classmate, so you really shouldn't disappoint him.

How many syllables are in each line? With a poem of this length, you could probably get away with as many as 12 per line. You'll probably need that many to keep the poem at a reasonable length. :P
  








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