To start off: I'm not into vampires and werewolves, and to tell you the truth, I DON'T EVEN KNOW IF I SPELLED WEREWOLVES RIGHT! Proving my lack of interest in the Twilight series, and so on, there are flaws of which you must which both acknowledge then correct. Some advice, first of all, would be your sentance structure. Make your wording unique. Example: Instead of saying "It hit me hard." Say something ranging around the likes of "The impact was severly felt." I mean, that's not a good example of what I mean, but I hope you can see where I'm trying to go with this. Secondly, take care to plant seeds of knowledge at the beginning of your work, and from water out your provided information, making it able to build off of throughout the ENTIRE STORY! Concluding my short critiques, I'll simply say proof read, proof read, PROOF READ! I especially know the meaning of this, and a good writer always notice different flaws of their work when reviewing. KEEP IT UP!!!
Kendall- The best writer is never done improving his novels.
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