Young Writers Society

Eventually this world will have
No mamals on it's face.
Space will come the living space
Of the human race.

"Space will come the living space
Of the human race,"

... What?

OK... umm, what part of this would you need help with? What's the entire.... idea of this poem? Nobody can really help unless they know it's plot. I can guess the structure, 1213. But yeah... hmm... we'll need help before we can help you.

What's the point of this poem?

A grammar issue:

no mammals on its face

Okay pardon me for saying this but HUH? That me utterly confused.

cathy wrote:I don't really have a meaning, and it was never going to go anywhere!

Come on now. If you believe that then you shouldn't write at all. You just need to work on it, believe me people can be harsh but it's for your own good, though nobody is a Psylynx.
Repost the poem I demand you, just get a point to it.

uh...i honestly don't get it. but i'm sure it has a special meaning to you, and that is why you wrote it. however, poets must learn to channal their emotion of a certain situation or idea into something that people can understand. don't think i'm just being mean to you, hell i've written alot of poetry that i've had to go back and rewrite because the idea just did not transfer to an audieance. this doesn't mean you should conform to whatever you hope people might like, it just means you have to think more of what others will feel/experiance when they read the thing. much luff to you, and i hope you can figure out a way to make it work.

I don't really know why (almost) no one else understood it. I quite liked it, although I had to read it two times to understand it, but thats probably because of the spelling errors.

cathy wrote:Eventually this world will have
No mamals on it's face.

'Mamals' should be 'mammals'.

cathy wrote:Space will come the living space
Of the human race.

Space will come? Shouldn't it be, 'Space will become'?

well too short... thats why no1 understands it. It isn't long enough to explain what you mean.... did you get bored or something?

uhhhhhhhh

what is it about, exactly? people killing the planet? i just thought i saw a jellyfish in the sky, so i might very well be delusional...

don't want to be rude but, what is this? is it an accrostic or what?
confused

I don't get it......