This is just a brainstorm of all the things I want to include in my school essay. I have a really hard time organizing ideas and this is all that came out for my "pre-write". Looks more like a jumble of thoughts to me. I'm supposed to write an analytical essay for Lord of the Flies and leave a lasting, impacting impression through the conclusion.
Imagine being stranded on an island with few other people…living without a society, would a civilization form where the people would try to follow the rules and have moral values, know the difference between right or wrong? Or would the people rebel…desire for power…result in loss of order?
In William Golding’s Lord of the Flies, there are many different possible themes that can be drawn from the novel. One of these themes is the discovering the dark side of human nature. At first they tried to construct a civilization where everyone would work together to create a society.
The majority of the boys voted for Ralph to be the leader instead of Jack, and Jack was infuriated by this, though he tried to hide it. In the end Jack’s hunger for power resulted in his turning into a savage and the murders of Piggy and Simon. Jack forces Sam and Eric to join his tribe through fear and torture and begins the hunt for Ralph with the intention of killing him (a result of his jealousy, desire for power and the absence of rules/government)...If there were no boundaries and no laws, would a society crumble?
Once I got past the random thinking and brainstorming, I began a pre-write....
Introductory Paragraph
Intro: Imagine being stranded on an island with few other people…living without a society, would a civilization form where the people would try to follow the rules and have moral values, know the difference between right or wrong? Or would the people rebel…desire for power…loss of order?
Thesis: In William Golding’s Lord of the Flies, there are many different possible themes that can be drawn from the novel. One of these themes is discovering the dark side of human nature.
1st Body Paragraph
Topic: The instinct to kill is strong when you’re in the wild (or something, idk)
Support: Jack’s desire to hunt the beast…
Support: Jack’s tribe killing Simon and Piggy, and force Sam and Eric to join, then begin the hunt for Ralph.
Support: Ralph and Piggy (the supposedly sensible ones) participate in killing Simon.
Concluding sentence:
2nd Body Paragraph
Topic: Jealousy taking over and the corruption of power…
Support: Jack’s desire for power – most likely would have resulted in dictatorship.
Support: His envy of Ralph resulted in him wanting to murder him.
Support: Forcing Sam and Eric to join his tribe through torture.
Concluding sentence:
Yeah, I know, it's a crap of a draft. I've got nothing past the intro. I feel embarassed having other people read it, but I'm in need of some serious help. So any ideas would really help. Once again, I just really need help to make the body paragraphs. I know I'll have the conclusion down if I could just improve the body paragraphs. Also, I think I'm in need of better topic sentences, if not for the 2nd body paragraph then definitley for the first. Thanks so much!
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