The subject might be unclear, so I'll explain further. The narrator is actually a character. He is a Baird who tells a story from inside a tavern. The problem I'm having is how do I write about the environment and the actions the Baird is doing, when he is the story teller? I'm thinking maybe write in italics?
The setting will mostly be the story he is telling, but it will, from time to time, go to the tavern where he is telling the story.
I'm trying to skip out on describing things in the tavern, but I don't think I can do that completely. Here is what I have so far.
“La dee da dee. Drinky drinky, smokey, smokey. Let's find a girl that I can po-.”
Oh, hello there. I wasn't aware I had company.
Why are you staring at me like that? Oh, my apologies. Where are my manners. I haven't yet introduced myself; have I? My name is Tugurls Von Cuppe, Baird extraordinaire. Now, I'm assuming that the misconstrued scowl on your face tells me that you're a tad indifferent of my presence. Seeing that you're the one who recklessly sat along side myself, in this fine drinking establishment; you are in no mood for conversation. Well then, luck may be on your side. You don't have to say a word. You can sit there quietly, drinking all the ale you can handle, as I will do all the talking.
I've yet to tell this tale, and as a Baird, storytelling is my craft and I have to hone it to perfection. As we all know, practice makes perfect; so this is, shall we say, a practice run. So tune your ears and open your gullet. Prepare yourself for some ale and a tale, as we begin our journey with three young warriors on their epic quest to... Hold on a moment.
As you can see, the "singing" part is in quotation marks at the beginning. Also, at the end there will be an action. *spoiler* he is going to take a bong rip. So I can either use a descriptive action, or try to use an onomatopoeia and have him verbally explain what he is doing.
Your thoughts will help me out quite a bit.
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