Young Writers Society

Okay, I have just wrote a poem, i'm 12, and i'm wondering if this is any good.
PS. This peom is from a man's POV.

She drifted slowly through the sea,
holding the key to my heart,
and when she slowly sank that day,
it tore my world apart.

My ship rocked through the ocean,
a mystery of secrets and time,
slowly moving past the land,
the view worth a penny, a dime.


As she flowed past the liners,
the workers looked on in awe,
taking in the elegant grace
defying the most important law.

Yes! The law of gravity!
She looked as though she was flying!
Propelling through the calm waves,
producing a most beautiful thing.

Is it okay??

I'd say the best place to post this would probably be in one of the poetry forums. That way you'll get a good solid review! From a brief read, this seems like it has a lot of potential. So I'd certainly work with it. Again, post this in a poetry forum for more solid reviews.

Or, as they're now known, Browse! Click "add new work" at the veeery top of the page and follow the instructions. ^^