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sorry if this is in the wrong place I wasn't sure if it should post here or in miselenous.
Anyway. Yesterday I was writing an extract from my story as it was and I came across a scene that had gone well in my mind but didn't work at all when I tried to write it. In this scene it is told from the third person or as if from a perspective of a ghost watching these two people. The scene consists of entirely actions and no dialouge. Both of the characters are male and I suddenly came across a problem such as using alot of he's to describe both characters which got confusing as to who was being refered to. I then started trying to use the characters name in places but it got to repeditive and unnatrual. Expeshily with one characters name being three sylables long. Does anyone know of another way to aproach this? Some techniques to make this scene flow without excessive use of he's or tougue twisting names?
Exuse my spelling my mind is everywhere today.
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