Hey I'm writing a story and wanted to get some input on a way to improve my writing as its pretty subpar. This is part of a fight between gods and I would appreciate any comments/ or criticism on it thanks. I'll put it below as I don't know how the spoilers work.
Their auras were… incredible for lack of a better word. The energy they produced was so massive that it nearly blew us away and it took a large amount of my energy to hold us in place.
There were no words only action… in an instant they both disappeared and only a large burst of energy was left behind. Clang of metal rang out between the two gods each time causing a large impact, it was quite obvious that they were almost equal in power as they easily cancelled each other’s attacks blow for blow.
A high slash, a low slash, a stabbing attempt a slicing motion. Raynard attacked quickly and relentlessly yet all of his attacks were repelled. A shield bash, a sharp kick a powerful punch but they were too slow to hit their opponent. Kira’s focus increased slowly with each attack. She then began to speak in a somewhat harsh tone.
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