Alright, let me give a "brief" description of my story... it's long :\
A woman prone to taking walks out at night ends up at the wrong place at the wrong time and ends up embroiled in what could almost pass for a swat mission. However the language she hears them speaking is not one that exists, a marriage between bell chimes and german would be close, they speak almost musically. She decides it would be best if they didn't see her, however the turn of events leads her into masquerading as one of the now apparent 'alien' beings. No matter how human they seem.....
The story goes in depth into the culture of this race which ends up being the 'father' of ours genetically and uses our planet almost like a cultured petri dish for experiments to improve themselves. These aliens have a superior attitude toward humans and the protagonist masquerading as one of them finds out that there is dissension in the ranks of the classes.
(Quick note - Language is not an issue as technology and circumstances take care of it as well as facial recognition problems... They don't realize she isn't who she says she is)
The overall ending is what concerns me. The ascended council which resides over the very caste dominant society used to search for 'understanding' however since not everyone ascended there came up a question - wouldn't it be better if they could 'boost' everyone up, as a thought is not a thought unless someone has thought it, and everyone has the capability for thought.
Reactions to this caused disagreement in the very 'telepathic-like union' the ascended shared. The understanding of why it had not originally been so had been lost and because such disagreement was harmful to them as a whole so they stopped disagreeing and lost something. What did they lose? Nothing really, except that the state of their minds changed and gradually they became warped as nothing was done to fix it. Their quest for understanding changed to 'knowledge', and then to 'power'. They would not let others ascend on their own and would instead review those who showed promise of doing so and decide whether to 'promote' them. Their method of dealing with those whose principles did not align with theirs became harsher, and with the resources they had, what once had been was forgotten or destroyed.
Our protagonist because of the help of a general (from the beginning of the story) has the capability to ascend herself and be an uncorrupted voice in the blackness, however one other who showed promise of ascending (but with the council's favor) tries to stop her and they both end up ascending together, separate from the corruption of the council, but with a new understanding of each other.
A.K.A - There is no 'good' or 'bad' and with the two's acceptance of each other, rather than their destruction, they hold the ability to heal the corruption that has been done to the council, and be a leading force..... Her, for humanity, and what had been done to them. He, for what the council had done to his people. Different versions but in reality the same. To help guide everyone away from trying to lay blame and be a voice of understanding. What was originally shrived for but with an understanding of itself.
I'd like to hear everyone's opinion on the moral of this story, whatever you think.
(Another note - There's a lot of the story left out here, how she got from A to B, and much of the flavor is only hinted at, but I would still like any advice you might be able to give for the Plot)
Thanks! I really appreciate it!
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