But, yes, this is a question I seem to be debating internally over for a couple months now.
You see, whenever I write a scene or something it always comes off to me as a "I'm a visionary (who's actually just imitating things he's not talented enough to pull off.)
For example, I'll use some metaphors that I think sound poetic/lyrical, but does it go too far?
Her words were as unpleasant as a biting winters wind
or:
His eyes were angry, angry as a fire consuming wood.
Those were a bit cliched but you get my point right? They could come off as slightly snooty.
It''s either that or I use big words that really aren't necessary to tell the story.
"Why?" He inquired
Why not just say: "He asked."?
Or my sentences drag on unnecessarily :
The table was removed from the other tables so people who sat at it could have a private confab.
Why not just go "The table was in a tight corner so people could have a little privacy."
Is this a matter of my "Voice" coming through and should I change it if I don't like it or do you just think I'm being my worst critic?
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