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Catherine~ A Mystery Set During the French Revolution



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Fri Oct 27, 2006 8:20 pm
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Last edited by darksleuth64 on Tue Jul 24, 2007 5:01 pm, edited 2 times in total.
  





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Fri Oct 27, 2006 8:22 pm
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*moved to Historical Fiction*
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Mon Oct 30, 2006 10:32 pm
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Hullo Darksleuth. Spacing--though not a difficulty in printed books--makes rather more difference on the forums.

It's almost impossible to read all that text bunched together. Space it out, double?

It had a dramatically bleak beginning, and I liked the use of short sentences in between to pace. I'll be back to look over it if you'll do me the favour of making it more legible. ^_^


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