[This is the intro to my newest story idea. I just wanted to post it up and see what everyone thought of it. If it's generally liked, then I'll post up the progress of the story as it goes along, assuming I have the creative vein to do so. Thank you for any and all comments.]
The moon was mesmerizing that night.
A magnificent orb of white gold, it had punched a hole clean through the thick veil of night; a nothingness surrounding everything. The silver reflection slithered across the dark waters of the River, and crowned the droplets of dew that glistened upon the soft leaves. These were shaken off in turn by the deep rumbling of the tree canopy against the harsh midnight gale, which threatened at moments to overturn any structure daring to face against its strength.
Threaded shadows lingered for seconds by the riverbank. An aura of loneliness lingered beneath the thicket of crumpled vines and weeds, before a violent flash smoked out the despair, replacing it with a sense of dynamism.
Dim gas slithered through the air, curling, twisting. A similarly dim character was disappearing into the night behind it, ragged cloths snaking from its shoulders and a thick strap of cotton on its face smothered everything but its dark, yet precocious green eyes. And so it ran.
The storm was beginning to rage in earnest now. Rolling globules of moisture pounded the stranger’s back, coating it with a thick layer of damp. It was difficult running against the wind, but not an unfamiliar task – in this part of the world, rainfall was a common occurrence, if not one of Mother Nature’s incurable habits. Storm clouds, thick and unyielding, gathered overhead, black as the fearful cover of night and heavy with the ocean’s tears.
Further ahead there was a village, inhabited by small families that had known each other for generations upon generations. Seldom had anyone arrived at – or left – the village, so the population remained steady except for the inevitable visits of the underworld or the stork.
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