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My favourite line!! The first time I read it I was like 'Wooowww!!!', so great job! Keep writing and I'll be sure to check out more of your works.But the spaces between her bones echoed with a fading force
thatoddkid wrote:I didn't want her to die during the winter. But the spaces between her bones echoed with a fading force(What are you saying?), and everything trembled, thin legs unstable as she walked. Her hand in yours, you holding it as tight as possible just to try and keep her in the purple of the cosmos, but her hand would shake anyway, and you could never hold it tight enough, could never stop the pieces from falling apart.
I didn't want her to die during the winter. But the spaces between her bones echoed with a fading force, and everything trembled, thin legs unstable as she walked. Her hand in yours, you holding it as tight as possible just to try and keep her in the purple of the cosmos, but her hand would shake anyway, and you could never hold it tight enough, could never stop the pieces from falling apart.
I didn't want her to die during the winter. But the spaces between her bones echoed with a fading force, and everything trembled, thin legs unstable as she walked. Her hand in yours, you holding it as tight as possible just to try and keep her in the purple of the cosmos, but her hand would shake anyway, and you could never hold it tight enough, could never stop the pieces from falling apart.
(Also here, you wrote spilt, when you meant to write split)Its white tendrils snaked through her eyes, and when she looked at you they spilt her eyes into islands of diamond blue.
But they'd said she wasn't worth the poison it would take to save her life, and I imagined the tumor in her brain like a second heart, but it took in life and never sent any out.
But I didn't love her. I did love her, but I didn't love her. And I think that was the last time she cried.
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