Well, it's too long for me to pick out any mistakes or anything, cos I'm tired. But generally, the plot was good. It is certainly of the standard you would see published and I would not be surprised to read this in a publication you could buy/pick up. Enjoyed it, even though it wasn't my usual genre to read.
I really thought it was very funny. Especially the part about the fifth grade girls...ha ha. A lot of the girls in my school look like that...and they do look trashy. Ah well.
Wow. I have to take some notes off of this...help me with mine. lol
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