Well done! I've read a few things on this subject and I've hated them all, thinking it was just because I was bias, but I'm actually really impressed with this one. You protrayed the emotion perfectly, and I can actually see this happening to someone in reality. And your comment totally gave that away about the father, and now I'm a bit disappointed But I definitley plan to read part two, and I normally try to avoid reading things like this.
Let's eat mom. Let's eat, mom. Good grammar saves lives
Don't aim at success--the more you aim at it and make it a target, the more you are going to miss it. For success, like happiness, cannot be pursued; it must ensue, and it only does so as the unintended side-effect of one's dedication to a cause greater than oneself or as the by-product of one's surrender to a person other than oneself. — Viktor E. Frankl
But I definitley plan to read part two, and I normally try to avoid reading things like this.
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