Well done! I've read a few things on this subject and I've hated them all, thinking it was just because I was bias, but I'm actually really impressed with this one. You protrayed the emotion perfectly, and I can actually see this happening to someone in reality. And your comment totally gave that away about the father, and now I'm a bit disappointed But I definitley plan to read part two, and I normally try to avoid reading things like this.
Let's eat mom. Let's eat, mom. Good grammar saves lives
May you never steal, lie, or cheat. But if you must steal, then steal away my sorrows. And if you must lie, then lie with me all the nights of your life. And if you must cheat, then please, cheat death. — An Unknown Bride, Leap Year
But I definitley plan to read part two, and I normally try to avoid reading things like this.
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