Epigraphs

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There’s always a hush in a theatre in that millisecond before the curtains open. Just one fraction of a moment where no children are rustling their candy wrappers or sniffly housewives coughing as daintily into a handkerchief as they possibly can. For a moment, just before those curtains open, the theatre is silent as death.

I would know.

They were calling this show Antique Epigraphs. I knew a few things about epigraphs as well. I had seen more gravestones than I could count. But for now, I was revelling in the darkness of the theatre. Jolene had dragged me out; saying this was a premiere I couldn’t miss, saying that I needed to get out of that cold office and into the lights of New York City. I was reluctant. There was something about ballets that bothered me. Maybe it was seeing all those bodies in motion, contorting, moving. When you spent five days a week, twelve hours a day looking at corpses, you got a little uncomfortable with bodies that were still functioning. For once, though, I wasn’t miserable. The darkness of the theatre was comforting.

The theatre hushed, and the curtains opened. A figure leapt across the stage, in silhouette. I smiled slightly as the music soared. It was Debussy’s “Six Epigraphes Antiques”, not some carving on a gravestone. Not everything, I supposed, was about death.

But the magic did not last, and my revelation faded. As the figures on stage twirled and leaped, my mind sank back to my work. As every ballerina turned her neck, swanlike, I couldn’t help but to think how they would look twisted and broken; their pretty heads bent at an angle they could not achieve in life. I couldn’t help but to think of how those dancers, so poised in their white gauze and frills, were as mortal as everyone else. How they too put on their legwarmers at the end of the day and went home; how one day I would be seeing them on a metal cart, pale as the whites of their eyes and the chalk on their slippers.

I stood up to leave, but Jolene’s gloved hand reached up to stop me.

“Where are you going?” she hissed.

“Home. I don’t like ballet.” I replied gruffly. A few people nearby turned to shush us, and I broke her grip.

Outside, the cool February air bit at my cheeks. A siren screamed nearby, and people milled about in the twilight. I started the walk back to my apartment, eyes on the ground, hands deep in my pockets.

No, a ballet isn’t a place for a mortician. Perhaps there is no place for my kind at all. No matter where we look, no matter how many faces smile and feet leap and fists punch, we are constantly aware of our work. Everyone goes off to death in the end. Life just reminds us that some people walk in, and some people dance.




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The 1984 aspect was a little hard to incorporate, but Antique Epigraphs did indeed premeire in 1984, and I mentioned legwarmers. They were all the rage then, right?
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This is a really haunting piece. That's what I thought. That being said, I have really strange taste. As soon as I finish typing this, I'm going to like your piece. I thought it was really original.
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Heey awesome co-captain Tori!! *does the secret green handshake*
I'm going to try to give you a good review but I'm not really good at reviewing stories. So forgive me if I am not helpful at all or if this won't make any sense XD
Okay so I want to start off with saying that I really liked this piece!! Like Belarusbirdy said: It's really original. I just totally loved the idea behind it and how you worked it out. I like how you started the story. I could totally see a theater in front of me and hear that second of silence. Good job on that!
So here are some little nitpicks:
When you spent five days a week, twelve hours a day looking at corpses, you got a little uncomfortable with bodies that were still functioning.

This tenses in this sentence sound kind of weird to me, but maybe it isn't wrong at all and it's just me..Anyway, I think that got should be get and that were should be are. If this doesn't make sense then please forgive me XD

“Home. I don’t like ballet.” I replied gruffly. A few people nearby turned to shush us, and I broke her grip.

I really loved this sentence! No idea why, I just do! XD

OKay that was it! I really enjoyed reading this and I hope I helped a little.
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Spiderman here. *Also does the secret green handshake, but does it hanging upside down*

This piece was short and intriguing. As a reader, I was never bored. That mortician has the worst job ever. The fact that he left jolene at the theater makes him look bad though.

There’s always a hush in a theatre in that millisecond before the curtains open. Just one fraction of a moment where no children are rustling their candy wrappers or sniffly housewives coughing as daintily into a handkerchief as they possibly can. For a moment, just before those curtains open, the theatre is silent as death.



I loved this intro and the voice flows so smoothly into the rest of the piece. it says epigraph, so i'm assuming theres more to this piece.
Despite the lies that you're making
Your love is mine for the taking
My love is just waiting
To clothe you in crimson roses

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Thanks, green teamers. *does secret handshake back*
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When your heart gets pierced with arrows, don't rip them out and pierce those around you in retribution for your hurt. You'll only unnecessarily wound others and bleed to death yourself.
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