Hourglass (this was a free write- you are warned)

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Sureal
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Sun Jun 26, 2005 3:13 pm
Sureal says... · Sun Jun 26, 2005 3:13 pm
I haven't read any of the other Hourglass stories (I checked out your portfolio... you have loads of 'em...) but I read this one anyway ;).

It flowed well enough, and I had no trouble picturing the scene in my mind. So yeah - twas good :).
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Sun Jun 26, 2005 3:25 pm
Firestarter says... · Sun Jun 26, 2005 3:25 pm
I really liked this. The way it was written mimicked the scared thoughts in Luke's brain, and the fragmentation just supported the scene you were trying to portray. For a "free-write" this is pretty damn good.

Except there are no muskets!
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Sun Jun 26, 2005 9:42 pm
Sam says... · Sun Jun 26, 2005 9:42 pm
Yes, yes, a musket would be nice...:lol:
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Wed Jun 29, 2005 3:33 am
hekategirl says... · Wed Jun 29, 2005 3:33 am
This is so good Sam, I can't tell you how much I could FEEL everything you were talking about.

BUT MORE MUSKETS GIRL! lol sorry...
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