Suicide Note

I liked it, very emotional though i wish i knew a bit more about how they lost their life of luxury and where the dad was. Did he die? Did he go missing? Did he run away with someone else? Anyway that's just my opinion so feel free to ignore it.

Edited after much consideration.

Yay! A gold star!!
Actually, the note was supposed to include how her dad died and her uncle cut them off, but it sounded so corny I had to cut it off.

Thanks for the reviews!

Heyy,
I didn't have many nitpicks in this, but the few that I did are in caps in the quote

LilyJamey wrote:I hope you’ll be happier now, seeing as that’s one less mouth to feed. It’s hard to raise ten children on a single, meagre IT IS SPELLED AS MEAGER salary, isn’t it?

You don’t need an irresponsible girl who fails in almost everything. You don’t need a wheelchair-confined girl who either can’t or won’t do the merest task to help you. You don’t need a self-pitying girl who can’t draw, or sing, or even play to save her life. You don’t need me. I saw that.

You’re right. I was useless. I was hopeless. I knew it, and I knew that you knew it. Don’t you think I saw how you pent it up inside? I could always tell, whether I was going out for , supposedly, a stroll, or taking an unnecessary afternoon nap, I could tell that you were frustrated, that you wanted to break down after your day of work. That you were dying for a rest instead of the pile of house chores for your pains. You always saw through me. You always knew that I was just avoiding work. And yet, you kept mum.

It hurt. Maybe that’s why you did it – it hurt more than any yelling could. Or maybe you just knew that old habits die hard, and even if you did say a word, I wouldn’t change my ways.

Every night I’d sob myself to sleep, scolding myself, tearing myself apart, when the real one who should’ve been crying was you. You were so strong. You bore SHOULDN'T THERE BE AN IT HERE?all. I never lifted a finger, yet I was so, so weak.

Remember the toys you bought me when I was little? Remember the pretty little teddy bear, the one I lost? I found it. It was in the drawer, under all the old photos.

If you see any tearstains TEAR STAINS ARE 2 WORDS there, I'm sorry.

Wow, I'm really impressed with this! It was really emotional and something that I could imagine a girl writing. I couldn't find any other nitpicks that the other reviewers hadn't covered and I'm simply amazed! Oh, and I love that Felicity means happiness! The irony in that was the perfect ending to an amazing story! Gold Star for you!

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This was very a good letter. Even though you were obviously very full of emotion when you wrote, you did not express enough of the characters full emotion.
Donate my organs, if they're still whole.
Where is Felicia feelings? She writes out all of her feelings in the beginning, but where is her feeling in her final requests?
Sell everything of mine that can’t be used by Joanna, Daniel, Suzy or Angela.
These examples prove that you did not put in enough feeling in the requests. Your piece of writing is good but it can improve.

After reading this through a couple times, I realised there really is no way I could morally critique this piece. It was very sad and emotional to read and I give you props for taking up such a heavy topic for one of your works, but I just cant find myself saying you wrote anything wrong. It's like spell checking a suicide note in a sense. You just cant do it.

So I'll just give my overall impression. I found it very believable. It ran well and it was very sad and emotional. It took on a very interesting vibe to, and you made your character sound so strong in a sense. I know if I was in her shoes, I would never have been able to give everything up so easily.

Some say they hate this life and fear it, but to be honest, the greatest fear is in death itself.

This was well done and again, I congradulate you on taking on such a hard and contraversial subject!