I think it was great. Your description is very good, and the story is interesting. I think i spotted a few typos, but it could just be me.
{rubs eyes to get rid of the sleep clouding them}
My life is a broken stair
Winding down a ruined tower
and leading no where
You have to write the book that wants to be written. And if the book will be too difficult for grown-ups, then you write it for children. — Madeleine L'Engle, Author
That's why.
