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Mon Dec 15, 2008 6:02 pm
Kaylyn says...



PLEASE READ BEFORE POSTING A LINK. THATS ALL I ASK.

So, if you need reviews, post a link below. I'll review it...eventually. I want to give time to each story so I can review it properly. On the site constantly, so I'll get to it. Please post a link on here. Try not to PM me. I don't check it very often. Try to only put one or two things to review in one post. That way, I can get different people. After I am done reviewing yours however and have done some others, you can post another one after that however. Thanks!

I CAN REVIEW:

Fiction (any sort)
Art
Poetry

I WILL NOT REVIEW:

Fanfiction
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Non Fiction
Horror (because I stay home alone alot at night, and I hear noices. Scary pieces of work won't help that any.)

*Please keep in mind that I won't review anything with excessive bad language or sex scenes.
I can waver on certain non fictions.
Last edited by Kaylyn on Fri Dec 19, 2008 5:11 pm, edited 4 times in total.
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Wed Dec 17, 2008 3:32 am
KailaMarie says...



http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post400537.html#400537

I just edited this, so I hope it's better! (: But a rip-apart critique is welcome. Haha.
... :D ...
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Wed Dec 17, 2008 10:18 pm
Kaylyn says...



Done! Lets have another.
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Wed Dec 17, 2008 11:27 pm
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Night Mistress says...



topic31457.html

here. just don't ripped it apart too much. :).
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Thu Dec 18, 2008 4:15 am
canislupis says...



Hi!

Here's the link: topic35160.html

It's in other fiction.

Thanks!

~Lupis





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Thu Dec 18, 2008 5:12 am
anti-pop says...



Title: My Dearest Madelyn
Genre: Romance
topic40024.html

It's been shredded quite a bit already, so feel free to do your worst! :D
...Bitter cold, it grows
changing holds
cynicism the new norm...

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Thu Dec 18, 2008 2:30 pm
Kaylyn says...



Night Mistress, yours has been reviewd. I tryed not to rip it up to badly. :)

canislupis yours has been critiqued. It was beautiful.

anti-pop I'm about to start on yours.

So keep the writing coming everyone.
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Wolves may lurk in every guise.





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Thu Dec 18, 2008 2:35 pm
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Night Mistress says...



here is chapter one if you could reveiw that too.

topic32635.html
"I love you," she whispered in his ear, before taking his mouth with her own.

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Thu Dec 18, 2008 6:00 pm
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Kaylyn says...



Done with Anti-pop, that story was loaded with emotion.
I'm working on Night Mistress.
So keep them stories coming.
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Thu Dec 18, 2008 6:17 pm
Theodorable says...



Here's mine.
topic40372.html
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Thu Dec 18, 2008 8:51 pm
Lord Anzius says...



I need my story to be ripped.. Uh Reviewed I mean :D (The joke smells I know.)

Please rip these apart:

Grim Reaper:

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic34985.html

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic35271.html
To copy reality is good... But to create reality is much, much better.
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Fri Dec 19, 2008 5:10 pm
Kaylyn says...



Teddybear22, i finished yours.
On to Lord Anzius.
Keep them coming!
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Fri Dec 19, 2008 5:21 pm
Kaylyn says...



Lord Anzious, I reviweed yours. Anymore? Come on.
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Fri Dec 19, 2008 6:51 pm
Dr.Atl says...



topic40417.html

Here's the first chapter, feel free to be as brutally honest as possible.





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Fri Dec 19, 2008 7:14 pm
Kaylyn says...



Dr, Atl your review is done.
Anymore?
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Wolves may lurk in every guise.








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