Young Writers Society

College ate my life, basically. This is closed.

Despite any rumor you've heard, I can critique. Really. And here's where you can ask for critiques without me conveniently losing your PM!

For poems:

Give me the name, genre, and link to your piece.

Example:

Name: Life is like a paperclip
Genre: Dramatic Poetry
Link: http://youngwriterssociety.com/zepoemofdeath

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For stories:

If you want to get a critique, please give me the name of the piece, the genre, a short summary of the work, word-count, and a link to your piece.

Example:

Name: The Adventures of the Stupid Unicorn
Genre: Fantasy Fiction
Summary: A stupid unicorn finds himself being hunted by the IRS. Desperate to find some money for his taxes, he goes off on an adventure to steal money from the dragon.
Word Count: 4500 words
Link: http://youngwriterssociety.com/zestoryofdeath

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Anyway... some guidelines:

1. I don't do multiple chapters.

2. Me + Art = Epic-fail

3. Newbies come first, because they're cuter.

4. I favor people who've critiqued my own stuff.

5. No fan-fiction.

6. Bugging me slightly is fine, stalking me for critiques is unacceptable.

7. If you like the critique, donate some points.

8. Follow the format above or I'll ignore your stuff.

So yay!

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In queue:

If it's not crossed out and it follows the guidelines above, it's in queue.

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Completed:

Forsaken Ch. one by jasmine12

Thanatos by ProfessorRabbit

Unobserved by clueless

Don't Fret by kissthewitch

Another Day Awake by anti-pop

Visionary by Galerius

Scarlet by BigBadBear

A Thesis by errtu2

Slaughter-Man: Tastes Like Strawberries by Sir Mantis

On My Cinderella-Knees by Jasmine Hart

The Epic Quest to a Far Away Land in order to Defeat Evil And Save The World - Chapter 1 by TL G-Wooster

Chasing Rainbows by sofi

[s]hey, i have a piece which has had only one critique (it was a very good one but id like a few more )

title: chasing rainbows
genre: other fiction
summary: basically its just a piece about a father and a daughter who havent seen each other in years and then the piece is when they meet each other again. i know it sounds like a really cliche and over-done subject but give it a chance...and if it is one of those pieces then i dont want it to be!
word count: 996
link: topic32572.html ... i dont know if this will work...

so ye please have a look. and ill go and critique some of your work etc if you want.
thanks[/s]

When you say "series", does that include a thread with several chapters in it all wanting critiques?

TL G-Wooster wrote:When you say "series", does that include a thread with several chapters in it all wanting critiques?

Yep! And I say this because usually chapter one is enough for me to diagnose the problems and I don't like repeating myself continuously.

[s]Name: The Epic Quest to a Far Away Land in order to Defeat Evil And Save The World
Genre: Fantasy Fiction
Summary: Girl from our world gets zapped into a fantasy world full of heroes with white stallions, heroines with golden curls and an Unnamed Evil One Who Must Be Defeated.
Word Count: 1396
Link: topic26084.html

Just the first chapter then, if you'd be so kind. ^_^

I critted something of your's a few months back - does that help my credentials? I'll be cute and innocent and say you're amazing if you like. How many points do you want? (I'm generally broke)[/s]

I think there may be some misunderstandings... ^_^

I remember a lot of my critiquers (like, I can name some of my critiquers from the version of FREAK posted here in 2005) and if you've ever critiqued my work, I'll probably remember you and thus you'll be favored. So don't worry *too* much about that. But I won't ignore you, even if you've never critiqued anything of mine. So once again, no worries.

Also! It's standard (or at least, I hope it's standard) to give good critiquers a couple of points or something. It's not a requirement by any means. However! If you really really like my critique, you can donate a couple of points. It's nice and it makes me happy.

With that said! Your two stories are critiqued! Anybody else?

[s]I'd love one on this if you get a chance, and I'm happy to return the favour, though I tend to critque more poetry as I think my poetry critiques are better than my fiction ones. You can Pm me, or post in my thread here.

Name: "On My Cinderella-Knees"
Genre: Lyric Poetry
Link: topic32927.html

Jas[/s]

[s]Name: Slaughter-Man Ch. 1
Genre: Horror
Summary: A seemingly innocent guy prepares to murder someone. He also strips down into his underwear.
Word Count: 1562
Link: topic33229.html

If you could take a look at this, I promise not to spam you with Pokemonz. [/s]

Name: Mirror, Mirror on the Wall
Genre: Science Fiction
Summary: A man injects himself with a form altering substance.
Word Count: 2,627
Link: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic33308.html

Thanks.

Name: The Love Note
Genre: Supernatural horror
Summary: After finding and reading an old love note in his locker, high school Freshman Brad Liftridge finds himself being stalked by the spirit of the crazed teenager that murdered his uncle years ago. (That sounds really stupid now that I've actually written it down).
Word Count: 3,412
Link: topic33373.html

Sorry, it's kind of long, but I just posted it and if you could look at it that would be great.

[s]Name: Scarlet
Genre: Fantasy
Summery: A mentally retarded teenager finds a scarlet rubber bouncy ball and plays with it. But it rolls away and breaks through a window--into another world!
Word Count: 715 (or something close to that)
Link: topic33578.html

I love you, Snoink!

-Jared[/s]

[s]*sneaks in*

Name: Thanatos

Genre: "Other Fiction"

Summary: A teenager almost dies, then learns some interesting things and gets a new job.

Wordcount: Just barely shy of 2k

Link: Thanatos

*bows and flees*[/s]

[s]I love you and you are awesome.

Name: Singed Fingers and Disappointments.
Genre: Other Fiction.
Summary: Young boy is thought dead, taken to funeral home, is not really dead.
Word Count: 952
Link: post398962.html#398962[/s]

[s]A pm!

Ho Hum.
Name: A Thesis
Genre: Other Fiction
Link: topic33738.html
I am patient, and I am only sending you this because I want some brutal S&M criticism from a writer I admire. I ought to mention that this is the first story I wrote...eva.[/s]

8 ways of looking at trees
other poetry
topic33901.html

a heads up, this is thought out. Try and count the references!
by the way thanks for the last critique, it certainly helped a bundle.