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Wed Jul 02, 2008 9:05 pm
Twit says...



Okay, so this isn't really Something Completely Different, or even slightly original but what the hey.





I critique (awesomely, btw)

Any fiction, except Romance. Mainly because it makes me squirm.


I do not critique (with awesome refusal)

Poetry. Full stop, end of story, exploding grenade. No poetry. The Vogon has spoken.

Romantic Fiction, as already stated.

R-rated stuff. R-ratings make me pale and faint.


Things I kind of, sort of, might do well

Dialogue.
Word order.
Description.


Examples

Gyr's Gypsie Eyes.
Rudelyn's Memoir
Gyr's In Thrall (there's several of my crits on that page)
OnCeUpOnAtIm3Xo's Eyes of the Empire



What I want in return

Ninja training.
An interview with Lex Luthor
Crits on Scavenger




It may hurt, but it helps.
Last edited by Twit on Thu Jul 24, 2008 12:45 pm, edited 2 times in total.
"TV makes sense. It has logic, structure, rules, and likeable leading men. In life, we have this."


#TNT





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Sat Jul 05, 2008 11:38 pm
onceuponatim3xo says...



Hey TL G-Wooster!

If you could crit Eyes of the Empire I'd be so extremely greatful! You don't have to read the prologue, but if you want to you can :D

As for the ninja training, try this and for the interview with lex luthor try this.

Again, thank you so much! :D
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Tue Jul 08, 2008 1:00 pm
Twit says...



Done it!
"TV makes sense. It has logic, structure, rules, and likeable leading men. In life, we have this."


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Sun Jul 13, 2008 5:38 am
BigBadBear says...



Night Terrors

I have just posted this and wondered if I could get some reviews?
Just write -- the rest of life will follow.

Would love help on this.





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Tue Jul 15, 2008 9:22 pm
Twit says...



Done, BBB!
"TV makes sense. It has logic, structure, rules, and likeable leading men. In life, we have this."


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Wed Jul 16, 2008 12:28 am
Sleeping Valor says...



topic33112.html

^_^ Review please! This is actually due today. >_> I will take a look at Scavenger as soon as I finish all my homework. o.O
I'm like that song stuck in your head; I come and I go, but never truly dissapear.

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Wed Jul 15, 2009 8:55 pm
TaylaChase says...



Will you please review this for me? It's my entry for 'Which Path to take' and I need more reviews so I can make it better.

Dragon Tamer
Fantasy Fiction
G

topic50758.html

Thanks!



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Wed Jul 15, 2009 11:07 pm
pinkangel54123 says...



Luna 1

Luna 2

I would appreciate it greatly if you would review these two
Want a heavenly review?

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Thu Jul 16, 2009 12:35 am
MagnusBane says...



topic50661.html

This is for Rosey's contest. The deadline is on the 20th and... *cringes*... it, well, sucks. I'd really appreciate any advice.
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Thu Jul 16, 2009 3:52 pm
gamechanger10 says...



Hey, Jocelyn here.
If you have time, I'd love a review on both chapters I have posted of my NaNo, Darkness.
Chapter 1:
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic37645.html

And Chapter 2:
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic50503.html

Thanks!
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Thu Jul 16, 2009 4:36 pm
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Guys, um, this is kind of closed. :mrgreen: This is the equivalent of a zombie; a walkind-dead thread, resurrected. Out of date.

I'll complete the crits already requested, but the thread's closed. Let it die once more and sink slowly to the bottom of the forum.
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Thu Jul 16, 2009 4:45 pm
Nate says...



TL G-Wooster wrote:Guys, um, this is kind of closed. :mrgreen: This is the equivalent of a zombie; a walkind-dead thread, resurrected. Out of date.

I'll complete the crits already requested, but the thread's closed. Let it die once more and sink slowly to the bottom of the forum.


Then you should also indicate that in the initial post.

In any case, locking this.








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