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Sat Aug 09, 2008 11:58 pm
Jon says...



Me again!

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Please, It's a very short poem.


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Sun Aug 10, 2008 12:31 am
Conrad Rice says...



wiseman, took care of yours.

Sorry about it's brevity. I'm no good at poems, and don't post a lot when something's good anyway.
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Sun Aug 10, 2008 5:46 am
BigBadBear says...



Thank You Note to Donny

Just posted and could use a few pointers. Thanks, dude. ;)

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Would love help on this.





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Sun Aug 10, 2008 7:21 am
Jamie_rocks says...



Hi, I'm back. Thanks for the review, but could you please help with the second chapter? It really needs to be ripped to shreds. Thanks in advance!

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Sun Aug 10, 2008 11:10 pm
Conrad Rice says...



Bear, Jamie, got yours taken care of.

Who's next?
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Mon Aug 11, 2008 12:32 am
Kylan says...



Greyhound

Your critiques of the Siren series were most helpful.

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Mon Aug 11, 2008 1:19 am
Conrad Rice says...



Got your story, Kylan.

Next contestant, step right up.
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Sat Aug 16, 2008 8:58 pm
Reason Invalid says...



Hello, would you be so kind to review the opening of my novel? Thanks in advance. :)

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Sat Aug 16, 2008 9:37 pm
Black Ghost says...



Could you review the short story in my sig? It's a bit unsettling, but it's supposed to be accurate portrayal of someone who's living with Obsessive-Compulsive Disorder.

I'd really like advice on whether or not I'm getting the right emotions across, and whether or not it goes at a good pace. But other than that I'd love comments on anything. :P

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Sat Aug 16, 2008 11:00 pm
Conrad Rice says...



Reason, Ghost, I got yours done.
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Mon Aug 18, 2008 5:29 am
Clo says...



Con, my buddy, who searches for the outside world with me... (if you remember XD)

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Please? :)
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Mon Aug 18, 2008 7:57 pm
Conrad Rice says...



Critiqued your story, clo.
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Tue Aug 19, 2008 12:47 pm
Twit says...



something kind of scavenger

For a contest, so it needs mucho help, please. :D
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Wed Aug 20, 2008 9:02 pm
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TL G-Wooster, yours has been critiqued.
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Wed Aug 20, 2008 9:20 pm
Jon says...



Can you believe it? Me again

Ok, this time it is a Children's Story i am wanting to get published, but before i do i want it to be as good as it can be!



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