Okay, here's one that badly needs to be shredded. Sorry, it's kind of long. I'm mainly worried about dialog, character development, and if you think it's too rushed.
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Thanks in advance, and I'm still working on reviewing the Canaby Sisters. Sorry it's taking so long.
P.S. Really, don't be afraid to shred it. Harshness is good.
Is there anything you're asking for in return?
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