Poetry Shreds

Lumi

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Wed Oct 05, 2011 7:53 pm

Lumi says... · Wed Oct 05, 2011 7:53 pm

I review Poetry, Scripts, Ambiguous wtfs, etc. Sweet talk me enough, and I may touch stories or chapters.

It'd be cool if you'd designate how much mercy you want with your request.

Leave a link to the piece, and I'll get to it.

Last edited by Lumi on Wed Aug 08, 2012 5:58 am, edited 4 times in total.

I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.

-Shinji Moon

I am the property of Rydia, please return me to her ship.

Jas

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Wed Oct 05, 2011 11:47 pm

Jas says... · Wed Oct 05, 2011 11:47 pm

sortakinda old, but it's been edited. :]

viewtopic.php?t=83256

Thank you!

I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~

Lumi

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Thu Oct 06, 2011 3:39 am

Lumi says... · Thu Oct 06, 2011 3:39 am

Done!

I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.

-Shinji Moon

I am the property of Rydia, please return me to her ship.

Twit

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Thu Oct 06, 2011 12:11 pm

Twit says... · Thu Oct 06, 2011 12:11 pm

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This needs help. Badly. I would do Bambi eyes but my contacts will pop out. Cookie?

"TV makes sense. It has logic, structure, rules, and likeable leading men. In life, we have this. We have you." -Abed Nadir

Lumi

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Thu Oct 06, 2011 9:32 pm

Lumi says... · Thu Oct 06, 2011 9:32 pm

Done!

I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.

-Shinji Moon

I am the property of Rydia, please return me to her ship.

Audy

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Sat Oct 08, 2011 5:48 pm

Audy says... · Sat Oct 08, 2011 5:48 pm

Lumi, please! This needs help!

viewtopic.php?t=88541

And I'd love to chat with you.

'Tis the season! Donate your poetry.

Lumi

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Sun Oct 09, 2011 3:40 am

Lumi says... · Sun Oct 09, 2011 3:40 am

Done!

I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.

-Shinji Moon

I am the property of Rydia, please return me to her ship.

Laurence Branson

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Sun Oct 09, 2011 6:20 am

Laurence Branson says... · Sun Oct 09, 2011 6:20 am

Lumi,
Would you review mine: viewtopic.php?t=88396
It's a short story, though. If you're not up for it, then don't worry

The worse thing I can be is the same as everybody else.
A.S.

UrbanNomad

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Sun Oct 09, 2011 11:09 am

UrbanNomad says... · Sun Oct 09, 2011 11:09 am

Lumi,

I have a special poem for you to rip apart/praise or show disgust for...
"The New Congregation"
viewtopic.php?t=88518

It is about spirituality in modern times from my city of Auckland, New Zealand
I look forward to your critique
Oliver (Nomad)

LadySpark

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Sun Oct 09, 2011 3:49 pm

LadySpark says... · Sun Oct 09, 2011 3:49 pm

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The glass Stairs. Probably the best poem I've ever written.

I bribe you with fluffy dogs that are asleep

hush, my sweet

these tornadoes are for you

-Richard Siken

Formerly SparkToFlame

LosPresidentes

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Mon Oct 10, 2011 6:01 pm

LosPresidentes says... · Mon Oct 10, 2011 6:01 pm

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Pick one.

I quit

Dreamwalker

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Thu Oct 13, 2011 6:46 pm

Dreamwalker says... · Thu Oct 13, 2011 6:46 pm

If you have the time, of course.

If not, don't worry about it.

Suppose for a moment that the heart has two heads, that the heart has been chained and dunked in a glass booth filled with river water. The heart is monologuing about hesitation and fulfillment while behind the red brocade the heart is drowning. - R.S

Daisuki

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Sun Oct 16, 2011 1:43 am

Daisuki says... · Sun Oct 16, 2011 1:43 am

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I've been experimenting with a new style lately and need opinions. Not in much of a hurry, either, so take your time... and thank you!

Oh, I wish I was punk-rocker with flowers in my hair.