Young Writers Society

Ok!!! haha I have no idea how to do this!!! But I guess I will just post and please correct me if Im doing this wrong!!!!

Im going to review 10 things from the Green room to become a Squire!!!

Josie

P.S. so now do I just link my reviews to here?

First review... nine more to go!!!

The Twelve Hour Gangs (opinion needed)

Hey,
Josie here to write a review!!!

"Leaving me with, at firstshock, and later memories of the time we shared." Space between "firstshock"

"The sorrow took over me as I never realised my time in his company was the best time of my life."
"The sorrow took over me" sounds a little funny! I think it would be better if you took out the "me" it might be personal preference but I think it sounds better!!!

"But to my disappointed meant he was not there." *Disappointment*
"I told you soph, you can never tell when the wells gonna run dry." "soph" should be a capitalized!!!

And thats all I see! I hope I didnt over look anything, I havent reviewed in a few days so I feel rather rusty. Sounds good to me though!!!

Josie

So above is my 2nd review!!!
For some reason I cant paste the url thing today! :/