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Mon Oct 24, 2011 1:54 am
Mikko says...



Us


Verse 1
Sitting under the willow trees
licking our citrus lollies,
as the grown-ups heat up the grill
we'd play and run like Jack and Jill.

Verse 2
How we'd grown up dreaming to be
you Harry and I Hermione;
under the bright fairy lights
we spent most of our nighs.

Chorus
Growing up together has helped me realise
that there's no one else in this world that can tell me lies
and I'll know.
You've been there since my ealiest memory
living in my mind, perfect reverie
and I know
that you wouldn't want to be in any other place
and I really can't stand not seeing your face
all this time.
Come back to where you belong
with me, as I sing you this song
about us.

Verse 3
I see you spinning round
like you've been spell-bound
and I miss you too,
and everything you do

Verse 4
We walked on the rain
we could do that again.
Are we dancing on the stars?
The world has locked us behind bars.

Chorus

Verse 5
Tears flow like rolling crystals
I listen to the voice that whistles
in my fragile ears.
Empty bottles, empty beers

Vers6
Litter the room around us
empty syringes, empty around us.
Citrus flavoured pills
'I owe you' bills.

And I feel that chill
as we play Jack and Jill...

Bridge
'Cause with you I can do anything
'Cause with you I feel like someone real
'Cause the moon is no longer shy
and neither am I
to say... I love you.

Chorus


End
I sing you this song
about us,
under the willow tress
with our citrus lollies,
about us
under the willow trees,
with our citrus lollies...
Last edited by Mikko on Mon Oct 24, 2011 4:17 am, edited 2 times in total.
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Mon Oct 24, 2011 1:59 am
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brittistenten says...



Wow thats really good, keep it up!
  





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Mon Oct 24, 2011 8:57 am
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JCK says...



As I don't know the rhythm of the song, at times it felt a little awkward. However, I'm confident that if given whatever music you used whilst writing this it'd feel better.

It's a nice little song, really, very meaningful to anyone who has lost a childhood friend whilst growing up. There are a few little changes I'd make, but hey; it's your song. It's probably perfect the way it is, to you.

~JCK.
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Mon Oct 24, 2011 2:02 pm
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murtuza says...



I can't wait to hear this in song! You're amazing at writing lyrics and this piece is very well written. It's sounds really endearing and the words flow like a stream. You have a talent for songs and I hope you never end writing them. Great work once again, Mikko!
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Mon Oct 24, 2011 2:03 pm
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LadySpark says...



MARCOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

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Mon Oct 24, 2011 7:59 pm
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youngwolf1105 says...



Hey, wassup? I really like it!! I write songs too, but none of them are as great as that! What kind of song is it?
We were made to corageous,
We're taking back the fight.
We were made to be corageous,
And it starts with us tonight.

And the only way we'll stand,
Is on our knees with lifted hands.
Make us corageous,
Lord make us corageous. - Casting Crowns
  





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Mon Oct 24, 2011 8:07 pm
JasperSkye says...



oh my gosh...i absolutely love this. so sweet...so innocent. beautifully written, my friend.
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