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Thu Oct 13, 2011 9:15 pm
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Carlito says...



[Starts off pretty slow with light piano accompaniment.]

Things were so much better,
When you loved me last September.
My heart felt so much stronger,
Cause I thought we’d last forever.
Things were so much better,
When you loved me last September.

The loneliness come back for me.
I’m drowning…
I reminisce about the good old days of us,
Even though those days are gone.
Even though it hurts my heart,
And it still makes me cry.
Even though they say you’re worthless,
It doesn’t feel right inside.

[More instruments are being added, drums, strings]

Things were so much better,
When you loved me last September.
Everything was perfect,
You said “I’ll be yours forever”.
Things were so much better,
When you loved me last September.

[Drum fill, climatic part. She's in pain, she's crying out.]

My heart hurts.
I can’t breathe.
What happened?
Why won’t you just talk to me?
I can’t take,
Anymore heart break.
Please….

[All of the music stops and there is silence for a couple of seconds]

[Piano and strings pick back up. It starts off slow and sad and gradually builds momentum and excitment until it's happy and jubilant]

Things are so much better,
Now that it is December.
My heart found someone better,
That won’t lie and say forever.
Things are so much better,
Now that it is December.

[Big]

I… Don’t need you in my life.
I’ve moved on.
My heart is strong.
It’s finally let go,
And said goodbye.

[Starts big and then moves back into the softer, nicer sound of the beginning.]

One of these days,
Oh… You’ll lie awake.
You’ll think about the good old days.
You’ll sit and wonder how I am,
Pick up the phone, find my number,
Before you realize you can’t.
And I’m fine with that.

Things are so much better,
Then they were last September.
You lied and said forever,
And this time I know better.
Things are so much better,
Now that it is December.
It does not do to dwell on dreams and forget to live.

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Thu Oct 13, 2011 9:22 pm
Mysticfury says...



Oh my gosh! When it comes to music I'm obsessed. I really like your lyrics. I love how anybody can somehow relate to this song. Although, in my eyes its slightly depressing, but I've found a lot of things depressing lately. Otherwise, it's great! I hope you get to record it one day soon!
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Sat Oct 15, 2011 2:11 pm
ShadowLily says...



This is like SO amazing. I love the way the words just flow together so naturally, I've never been able to do that well. Can you put a track with the music on YouTube and give me some kind of link? It would make more sense if I could hear it.
♫"ѕσ ηєχт тιмє уσυ ѕєє α ѕтяαηgєя, gινє тнєм α ѕмιℓє. αη∂ ιƒ уσυ єνєя ѕαι∂ α нυятƒυℓ ωσя∂, αρσℓσgιzє. єηנσу тнє ρєαcєƒυℓ νιєω ƒяσм уσυя вαcкуαя∂. ℓσνє тнє σηєѕ тнαт уσυ нσℓ∂ ∂єαя, 'cαυѕє ιт αℓℓ мιgнт ∂ιѕαρρєαя. уσυ ∂ση'т кησω ωнαт'ѕ cσмιηg ηєχт. ѕσ αℓωαуѕ ƒσяgινє, ηєνєя ƒσяgєт."♫ -My Song
  





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Mon Oct 17, 2011 12:35 pm
murtuza says...



The arrangement is brilliant. The lyrics are really good. There is a nice rhythm to it and I don't sense any strain on any of the lines either. Awesome work. The meaning in the lines are quite well made out. I hope to hear this in song one day.
All in all, just a really beautiful piece.
Keep the ink flowing! :)
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It's about being heard.
  








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