Young Writers Society

Informal anarchist, I puke and piss
on insufficient writs born from my mouth
Take note and try to fuck me up on this
I'm not heard or seen until guards run out
and push my face to the hard ground, my friends
As you dream that I am the one for you
The TV's my mic, come watch me ascend

~Chorus~
All rise for the pledge of the...
Politically brutal
Deliberately brutal
One nation under God...God....G-G-G-God
Politically brutal
Deliberately brutal
Fucking get off me, man...man...m-m-m-man

Mob meat's organic and quite orgasmic
I ejaculate violence and riots
As I shake the hearts of braindead spastics
Pen my law, break the law, won't be quiet
My will's recorded and viral, dumb ass
I shall be martyred at the strike of twelve
To fuck you up after I've quickly passed

GET IT
GOT IT
GO

(chorus)

Have you no shame?
have...have...have you no shame?
shame....shame...have you no shame?

I think it's safe to be heard now
heard...heard...I think...I think
I think it's safe to be heard now

I'd rather kill than to be killed
I'd rather kill than to be killed

(chorus)

They call me Anti-American
(Motherfucker!!!)
They call me a Neo-fascist, man
(Motherfucker!!!)
They call me a fucking hero, man
(You Anti-American motherfucker!!!)
They worship me like I'm Jesus Christ
(You Neo-fascist motherfucker!!!)

They asked for power
They craved new power
They'd lie for power
They'd kill for power
They'd die for power

They gave me power
They gave me power
They gave me power
They gave
oh, yes they gave

THEY GAVE
THEY GAVE ME POWER
THEY GAVE
THEY GAVE ME POWER

SO MUCH FUCKING POWER

Why are you an anteater? Well you can't quite edit a lot in lyrics, it's music.
Very violent wording, ow...maybe too many expletives, but asa I already said- it's music. Doesn't matter.
The title's good though, symbolic representation - if what I got is right.

.... I puke and piss
on insufficient writs born from my mouthI didn't quite get the meaning of this line, or maybe coz I didn't get the meaning of writs.
....As you dream that I am the one for you
The TV's my mic, come watch me ascendAgaiN I didn't get it, these 2 lines and this para doesn't seem to rhyme very well:)

.......
One nation under God...God....G-G-G-God I think I like this line, if it means that all unite as 1 Nation...

As I shake the hearts of braindead spastics...
My will's recorded and viral, dumb assAgain not clearly understandable



I'd rather kill than to be killedThis just sounds weird on the grammar somehow, but I may be mistaken though
I'd rather kill than to be killed



They call me Ant...............!!!) Maybe u could reduce the expletive usage here, And you brought in Jesus man?

They asked for power
They craved new power
They'd lie for power
They'd kill for power
They'd die for powerVery real, yes. I think I got the ultimate meaning, good topic and good work. Just trying to help by giving a useful review.

Hey, Lies! How're things shakin'?

Certainly a very colorful piece! So while the profanity is almost distracting (and no doubt there are songs out there as colorful as this), the message is still quite clear. Even the author's note you gave wasn't needed, and the reference to the political parties in the title was a clever indicator that the song's based on politics.

Couple brief points! As a song itself, I think it's put together well. Not much to suggest!

First, I question the title only because the song never mentions political parties. It only mentions government as a whole. So while the elephant and donkey was really an awesome trick, I can't tie in the title with the song. No where does it indicate a battle between the two major parties and the speaker's party. Only the government. Maybe the generalization is nothing to think about though. After all, the tone of the rap is quite offensive, so maybe that's done on purpose!

and push my face to the hard ground, my friends
As you dream that I am the one for you
The TV's my mic, come watch me ascend

This bit confused me, especially the middle line. I read through the song twice, and I still can't figure out why I would dream that the speaker was the one for me.

I'm rather a fan of how you ended it here:

They asked for power
They craved new power
They'd lie for power
They'd kill for power
They'd die for power

They gave me power

How it developed from government winning to when the speaker is winning. Very cool for the purpose of this song! Goes to show that bad events can end up making people stronger.

That's all I've got though, so awesome job.

Keep writing!

Jabber, the One and Only!