Young Writers Society

Something stirs on this cold night…
The city sleeps but still we
Still we fight and fight

Every soul cries out in agony tonight
Filled with sorrow we lose the light
Forgetting what’s right, losing the fight…

Tonight hope dies…

Passing graves of the unknown
We try to make our way back home
Illusions in sunlight fading
Keep me alive and waiting

Hope failing in the twilight
Grasping that nothing’s ever right

Next step and I’m running
Can’t stop my demons coming
Can’t stop my heart aching
Still I smile, faking

Can’t stop myself from falling
One more step I’m calling
Out for you to help me
Can you set me free?

I see the light, it’s blinding
I feel the truth, it’s binding
I hear the silence breaking
To my knees, I’m shaking

Lose insincerity
So you can see yourself
Reflections never lie…

Push me again, I’m leaving
Still can’t shake this feeling
That you’re missing the point…

Surrounded by hypocrites and liars
And anger to fuel their fires..

These four walls, they shatter
The broken pieces scatter
Here’s my life in tatters
Help me…

I see the light, it’s blinding
I feel the truth, it’s binding
I hear the silence breaking
Still my heart is aching

Left just trying to find a metaphor
To define the insanity inside
Fighting this subconscious war
No one in which to confide

The secrets I cling closely
The madness you will never see

This is why I’m running
This is why I’m coming
To the place where I belong
This is the lost ones’ song

All my life just waiting
For this moment, fating
Release the chains from me
Just set me free

I see the light, it’s blinding
I feel the truth, it’s binding
I hear the silence breaking
Sick and tired of faking

Oh the normality of being different.
Oh the difference of being normal.
Will the world ever find a way to change?

The sky is falling, that’s what they say.
The world is crumbling beneath our feet.

Calloused hands grasp at rusted blades
We all cringed as the sunlight fades
And we are wrapped in black again
All alone, so far from them
The ones we love, the ones we’ll never see
All that’s left whole is you and me

So I’ll run forever
Unafraid to venture
Far and wide alone…

Don’t care what may lie there
I know it ain’t my savior
As long I’m away from the place I call my home…

I see the light, it’s blinding
I feel the truth, it’s binding
I hear the silence breaking
Sick and tired of faking

Nothing at all can stop me
Nothing at all can stop me
Nothing at all can stop me now

You never take me seriously…

I like the rhyme in this poem. It's a pretty decent poem, but I am basing this only off my history as a poetic student moreso than a writer of poetry. I am sure you put a lot of thought and effort into the poem, but at the end of it all I am left wondering what the poem is really about? In a way it sounds like you're just ranting on about nothing - what is the purpose of the poem? Is there a purpose or was it just creative writing, writing where you just put the pen to the paper and wrote until you couldn't write anymore?

Agreed with the above statement, although I am well aware that this is a set of lyrics, not poetry; and lyrics shouldn't be written aimlessly. There has to be a point behind them, whether it be sharing a point of view, an experience or a story. Some even try to educate, or try to influence others, with this however I cannot deduce any possible context, and that makes it very hard to review the actual lyrics!

Hi there!

Wow, I really like this song. Please don't take offense to this, but it seems like all the songs that I read on here, I end up coordinating them with a tune. This song reminded me of Eminem and Skylar Grey. Some of it sounded like a rap, but other parts sounded slow and full of longing, like a ballad.

I really liked this song. The rhymes weren't the least bit cheesy or awkward, and the song (in my head anyway) was really catchy. The lyrics were beautifully written, and though there were a few grammar mistakes, I'm not going to nag you about it.

Overall, this song was amazing. I'd love to review anything else you've written, especially lyrics! Great job, I loved it.

~Amfliflier