Young Writers Society

The Last Song I'm Wasting On You
Verse one:
What I've been meaning to say; For so long
And yes; It matters
What I've been putting off each day; Cos I'm less strong
Than the all the others

I've been tolerating you for too long;
Then we parted ways; And this song
You're hearing; Is the last of its kind

Chorus:
Ah; This is the last song I'll be wasting on you
Ah; Those are the last tears I will cry over you;
Ah; This is the last time my heart will bleed as I think of you;
Ah; This is the last song I'm wasting on you

Verse two:
What I've been longing for some time: to have my heart on its own;
What I've been longing for some time; Is to let you go
What I've been longing for some time's to end this one-person show;

What I've ever wanted; Since we lost it; Was for the sun to rise again

Chorus:
Ah; This is the last song I'll be wasting on you
Ah; Those are the last tears I will cry over you;
Ah; This is the last time my heart will bleed as I think of you;
Ah; This is the last song I'm wasting on you

(Piano solo)

Chorus (softly):
This is the last song I'll be wasting on you
Those are the last tears I will cry over you;
This is the last time my heart will bleed as I think of you;

Because I'm lifting the weight from my soul;
Because I'm finally letting you go;
For this is the last song I'm wasting on you
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So...
This song is about someone who was once the most beautiful- and painful- creature in my heart.
I liked that person -a lot- but we simply lost it.
I moved out of that school, and when I started to song-write, I wrote about him so much- it was the only way to let out the pain...
Any way, I knew that I couldn't go on with this, and decided to write one final song- this was two months ago-this time about letting him go.
But I sent him a letter on FB saying some stuff, and he was like," you didn't need to say all this" ba bla bla.
(I don't mind saying that, cos it's not like he'll READ this, or something, right??
*Bright smile flatters* Right?)
...
So that's the story behind the song. In case you were wondering.
(Which I doubt.)

Any way, can you rate it?
The 1-10 scale (10 being super-awesome, 1 means not-very-nice.)

Thanks!
Cheers ,
Alpha

I'd give it an 8. Why? Because no song or poem, or anything, is a perfect 10! I don't see any errors as far as grammar and I love the way it's wrote. Keep it up! I hope someone can give you more feedback than I'm able to on this work of art!

Hey, Kathy!
Thanks a lot for your opinion, it means a lot to me cos this song is so personal...
I'm glad you enjoyed it, and hopefuly, someone else will, too.
Cheers!

Other than what I mentioned, there isn't anything else that's wrong with this except for the double spacing. That kind of get's annoying seeing that, sorry.