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Guillotine Desires



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Thu Mar 31, 2011 1:46 am
dregymayfield says...



~Chorus~
Somebody shut the brown hens up
Somebody shut the brown hens up
Why won't they shut the fuck up?
Why don't they shut the fuck up?

The white rooster sit's by himself
Dreaming blueprints of a perfect guillotine
So he can cut his own fucking head off
Slide down, slide down
Chop off, chop off

(chorus)

The white rooster covers his ears
And wishes he had a gun to go hunting
But a gun is too heavy
much like their endless chirping

(chorus)

Trying not to scream
Trying not to scream
The rooster wants to scratch at their throats
To rip our their throats
The rooster wants to peck at their throats
taking out their flesh
scratch and scratch
peck and peck
spill their blood the way their voices spill

(chorus)

Dreaming blueprints of the perfect guillotine
Dreaming blueprints of a perfect guillotine
To chop his own fucking head off

To chop his own fucking head off
To chop his own fucking head off
Last edited by dregymayfield on Thu Apr 07, 2011 12:36 am, edited 3 times in total.
  





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Thu Mar 31, 2011 5:37 pm
kathy45662 says...



Um...wow. Violent but I like the descriptions and visualization of the lyrics. I'd like to hear it as a song thou

It gives me the impression it should be lyrics for a rock song? This song is interesting.
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Sun Jul 31, 2011 7:27 am
LiesOnLies says...



This song was hillarious..even though I don't know what why on earth you would be talking about chickens..lol. It was a bit too violent and I'm wondering if there is a hidden message within this song. I really liked when you said this:

The white rooster sit's by himself
Dreaming blueprints of a perfect guillotine
So he can cut his own fucking head off


I could just imagine how silly it will be for a rooster to build a guillotine only to decapitate his own head off...lol
  





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Sun Jul 31, 2011 8:29 am
MasterGrieves says...



Yeah that line about chicken suicide was funny, but other than that it was great. It has a unique title, and reminds me of something of the album The Holy Bible by Manic Street Preachers. By the way, that is one of my favourite albums, therefore I am loving this. It is dark, funny, and very depressing. Long live chicken suicide!
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