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Beneath this smile



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Tue Mar 22, 2011 1:22 pm
Prats says...



Deep inside me,
There’s this unspoken feeling,
Seems like I’m sinking
Under the pressure
Of being good enough.

Deep inside me,
There’s this unspoken sadness.
The thought of being a mess,
I’m unable to endure.
Why ain’t I so tough?

[CHORUS:]
The truth of life I’ve uncovered is like
Not all scars show, Not all wounds heal,
Sometimes you can't see, the pain someone feels.
If you only knew,
Beneath this smile,
Lies a girl’s cry
Of despair,
Wondering day and night,
If anybody cares.
Beneath this smile,
Lies a torn soul
Crying hard;
Feeling not-so-whole
In life’s boulevard.
Wish you had a clue,
Of the real truth.
If you only knew…

Deep in my heart,
There’s this persistent desire
Just like fuel on fire
Of being liked by all.
Why can’t I put it out?

Deep in my heart,
There’s this aspiring illusion,
It’s a very happy one;
Without pits and falls.
Wonder if it’ll ever sprout.
Because…

[CHORUS:]
The truth of life I’ve uncovered is like
Not all scars show, Not all wounds heal,
Sometimes you can't see, the pain someone feels.
If you only knew,
Beneath this smile,
Lies a girl’s cry
Of despair,
Wondering day and night,
If anybody cares.
Beneath this smile,
Lies a torn soul
Crying hard;
Feeling not-so-whole
In life’s boulevard.
Wish you had a clue,
Of the real truth.
If you only knew…

So many times,
The world makes me doubt myself.
It’s a kind of fear that I can’t tell.
I wish I could find a way to help
Myself outta this darkness I fell… into…
If you only knew,
(What lies beneath this smile…)
Wish you had a clue,
(What lies beneath this smile…)
If you only knew…
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Wed Mar 23, 2011 3:19 pm
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lele253isme says...



I love, .love, love these lyrics. They are full of deep emotion and the lyrics are the type that I like. I love these lines:

Deep in my heart,
There’s this persistent desire
Just like fuel on fire
Of being liked by all.
Why can’t I put it out?


I think that you did a good, good job on this, Prats.
  





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Wed Mar 23, 2011 5:59 pm
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bugbug368 says...



Whoa! This is awesome! It's so catchy and I can kind of get the tune in my head, so that's a good sign. This is my one of the first lyrics I've reviewed, and this is probably the coolest ones I've actually seen on here. Well done, you obviously have a great musical talent.

Keep writing lyrics, you seem to be pretty good at it if you ask me. :wink:
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