Young Writers Society

(VERSE 1)
I've got these troubles in my head
I've been a little off lately
So get a good look and take a guess
You don't have much grace, but you'd still save me.
I will find the sound of bliss
In this house of mind
You always echo through me
A little flaw in a loud design.
(CHORUS)
I have these dreams inside of me
They hold me from my sleep
I wont pretend to ignore
You all just settle underneath the floor.
(VERSE 2)
Now every single step in this race
Takes me closer to the crash
And I would crawl underneath your wings
But I know these good things never last.
A careful look at how we are
Its hard to hear but might be useful
Seems to me we've been a thousand things
But I've never been so truthful.
(BRIDGE)
The hardest thing to feel
Is between the stepping stones
You fade away from the wheel
Cause she takes away alone.
(CHORUS)
I have these dreams inside of me
They hold me from my sleep
I wont pretend to ignore
You all just settle underneath the floor.




Still a work in progress, no permanent title yet, please critique anything and everything, and let me know if you think the structure is suitable. Thanks!

I like this! I wish I could know how it's intended to sound, but I think with a good beat this could be a really good song, something I'd listen to. There really isn't anything I have to pick on you about, so I guess that's all that I can really say about it.
Keep writing,
StoryWeaver

I'm surprised that 22 people read this and only 1 (besides me) responded. I don't understand why people read but don't respond either positive or negative. But this was a good song