Young Writers Society

Haa, Haa, Haa…
Rooftop leaping then I believe I am sleeping.
A monster is creeping in the night, wishing the light of the helicopter wasn’t so bright.
It is red and soon to be dead.

Haa, Haa, Haa…
Rooftop leaping then I am sleeping.
Every leap lands me in a heap.

This nightmare is old, chasing me through the bitter cold.
The building I passed by imploded, planes on fly.
The monster died the shadow cried.
So I lift up to the sky this great shift.

Haa, Haa, Haa…
Rooftop leaping … I am sleeping.
The lights pretend I will not descend.
Bloody nightmare, blood flows threw the air.
I slip right under covers with thoughts of midnight endeavors.

Haa, Haa, Haa…
Rooftop leaping then I am not sleeping.
Oh, not at all. Such a great fall.

This song is about a guy who finds when he is sleeping, he is a superhuman.
It all happens when " the lights pretend I will not descend"
meaning he has fallen from the sky, being hit with a bullet.

I like this! What is the "hha?"'s for though?(: It's very different, and unique. I like that you like to write like this. It's obviously about a monster trying to run away or something. Maybe you should explain more or go into detail about what the poem is about.

I like this a lot, however, this to me looks a lott more like a poem because of the lack of a chorus. I am not saying every song has to have a chorus, but it helps.

I don't get the laughing.

Also, the fact you had to explain what your song about is concerning. Maybe add more detial so it's obvious?

Keep writing,

Kay

The person who is leaping across roofs is laughing because leaping far distances and onto buildings is death defying. He is laughing to keep himself from stopping and freaking out.