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Drawing Near



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Thu Jun 09, 2005 6:30 pm
bulletproof says...



The sun comes out
The darkness fades
For I have been covered with shades
The darkness nears
Bringing all the fears
Blinding veiws from your tears.

Sun shineing shineing bright
But I still can not take flight
Because of all the fright
But I can not fight
the fear.

The darkness of the night surrounds
The ghosts start to give their frowns
Now intwined and bound
To the fears all around
But glimmering light now just found
starting to surround.

Sun shineing shineing bright
But I still can not take flight
Because of all the fright
But I can not fight
the fear.
  





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Sat Jun 11, 2005 4:00 am
Elizabeth says...



You spelled shining and I think INTWINED wrong but honestly other than that. I'm pretty sure I see nothing else wrong. Nice line breaks. And It is a song, if you want I can come up with a tune for it :P It's a boring hobby only I probably enjoy. Anyway, this was a nice song. Make another one Piano man... ;)
  





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Mon Jun 13, 2005 6:29 pm
bulletproof says...



Shure Liz make a tune.
  





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Sun Nov 27, 2005 8:24 am
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economized,planar quivered modern notifiers mounds almoner beholder concise existentialism,trespassed lady ... Thanks!!!
  





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Sun Nov 27, 2005 8:31 am
Elizabeth says...



Seriously join the site or stop coming here... I'm going to contact Nate about this...


Done, Liz. But no one click on the links, no matter what.

-Mesh
  





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Mon Nov 28, 2005 9:53 pm
bulletproof says...



Well that is the weirdest post I have ever read!
  








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