Young Writers Society

Your voice is absolutely gorgeous!! I loved listening to this song and never wanted it to end. Fantastic job! You're so talented, what with the violin, piano, singing and all...

Wow. MMM's review is brutal, yet...amazing in a strange way. There is really nothing left to review after that. O_O

Hey,

Werd Jenthura. Throughout the entire review I was like, 'Oh Jesus. This is an amazing review. This is a horrible review. Poor Jashy'.


~Jas

Jas, I'm used with critics like these. It's part of being an artist. You don't let people drag you down just because they dislike you. He was right with this:

WELL, Jashy, it's time this happen. I knew it would. Hell, we all knew it would happen one day.

Better early than sooner.

Hey.

I think it's the first time I'll ever comment on one of your works but I've read a couple previously.

I really liked the song. The piano was absolutely beautiful and the lyrics were well written as well. I'd nitpick but when I heard the song I found that the way you wrote it made it flow well when you sang. When you go into the lower notes, do you realize you kind of sound like Kitchie Nadal?:) Anyway, I liked the package, music and lyrics, and the video was great as well. It took me a while to register that you were from the Philippines.XD I was like 'was that... a jeep?'. )

Jashie

Another epic song. Can I be honest?

I didn't read the lyrics, I just watched the video. It's more fun! I'm sorry.

I like it though, I really do. The lyrics are moving, I would be crying right now if I had emotions. Which I don't. I have a stone cold heart. D:

Anyway, be proud and don#t let anyone put your work down~Its awesome! (Except the title) What has the title got to do with anything? I mean...DC?

Ignore me, I'm ignorant.

Mr. Meanie...

What a review! Thank you for your time scrutinizing my piece. I truly appreciate that. I thought though - as a music critic, and it was your job before - that you would understand it, and you would not be comparing me to people who already have been, with their music which already have been. (Wait, did that make sense? LOL)

But I suggest that you read more books about music, such as This is Music by David Randolph. If you don't have a copy, come here in the Philippines and I'll be glad to lend you my copy. =)

Jen, LOL He was joking about
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Kaka,

It's a secret. kidd', girl. I just don't want to spoon feed and force people to say, "Aaaah..." That's something people will have to figure out on their own. So far, no one's getting it. O_o Don't worry: I won't let people put me down. Thanks for the reminder, Ka! ;**

But be proud? O_o Oh, kaka... that's something else.

Over all, I definatly like it (and yes I will press the button when I'm done). The learics have meaning and are something orrigional, but they could use a little bit of editing. Your voice is definatly an alto. On those moments when you stepped off the suprano notes your voice really made an impression. Your high notes were verging on pitchy and getting close to the end of your range. I'm not saying stay well inside your comfort zone, but make sure you can still make your voice real and meaningfull.

And honestly, just because you wrote it when you were 14 does note make it bad; then again I'm 14, but really, anyone with ears can see it all came from deep inside (if that makes any sence).

Anyway, please keep singing and good luck!

Hey, Purp. Thanks for the comments. I do need to practice my falsetto, eh? Hmmmf... I'm gettin' there... soon? (LOL)

I love it so much. I wish- a great many things. I have a lovely voice (sorry for bragging, but how else are you supposed to know?) but I find it hard to actually write a song. You- soooooooooooooo aweeesooooooooooooooommmmmmmmme. Pay no attention to MMM, he's just being stupid. Though I agree that adding 'Oh' in a song is NOT cool. You are lucky. I don't have any real chances to let the world hear my voice.

Wow everything about this song is so beautiful! The lyrics, the melody and the video is great!
Well done!

Oh and i forgot to say you have a beautiful voice!!

Annie, hey, thanks for checking out. Oh, you can always team up with any lyricist here at YWS! There are a lot of great songwriters out there looking for someone to sing their songs for them.

Emalily, thanks. =)

This is really great I loved your lyrics, but I was also curious to hear you sing them, so I looked you up on youtube. It was really sweet. You play piano beautifully, and your lyrics sound even better when you sing them. I love this part:

Oh, you can’t save me from my misery
Just like you can’t save yourself from yours
I am steady
Standing breathlessly
Fighting against the floor

You sang this part nicely. Well done! Pat on the back from me. Keep up the good work!

-Smyli ;P

Hello there Jash.
I wasn't really going to say anything because other users have said so much already, so mine's just a comment. Anyway, you are really talented! and that's why I felt compelled to say something. Your lyrics are also quite deep. I just hope that someone else notices your talent and you're discovered or something soon!
Anyway that's all I wanted to say. Good job.