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Life is a puzzle
But the pieces don’t fit
The whole mess is a sh!t
And all the world’s a symbol
But I feel it’s a closed oyster
A strange forbidden cloister
Harley wrote:It'd be really great with a killer guitar solo after the third chorus. Then the guitars should fade out and all you're left with is a drum beat for the bridge, to set the mood.
The lyrics are pretty cool, except that this part:Life is a puzzle
But the pieces don’t fit
The whole mess is a sh!t
The last line is clunky and doesn't fit in with the rhyme scheme; it sounds too cliched for me, and this bit:And all the world’s a symbol
But I feel it’s a closed oyster
A strange forbidden cloister
The rhyme sounds too forced; you should work on the symbol part on the first line and carry it through to the couplet.
Hope I've helped; the song's pretty Blink-182-ish which is a grrovy style I love, so, yeah, I liked this. And Chevy's right: that string-on-finger verse is great.
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