Young Writers Society

Verse 1

I believe that we were meant to be--
forever and ever, eternally
but the stars in the sky
whispered to the mo-on
and made us forget
the things that we kn-ew.

Verse 2

And time came a-l-ong
and erased you from my mind
and love was cast
across the shooting line---

Chorus

You are the one that time forgot
the one that loved and lost
as time misplaced
your heavy heart
among the leaves and dust

Verse 3

Time---
hunted---
us---
down---
Till we couldn't escape
it was a fatal day

Verse 4

And time cut holes
In our faith
And blew our cares
and hopes far away.

Verse 5

And days went by and I forgot your name
And weeks went by and everything seemed the same
Yet you were gone--- Go-ne (up the octave)

Bridge

We were young with a pocket full of dreams
Optimistic, beautiful the world seemed
yet it came... as a thief in the night
Ruthless, uncaring in the fight---

Oooh (with piano interlude)

Chorus

You are the one that time forgot.
The one that loved and lost
as time misplaced
your heavy heart
Among the leaves and dust.

looooooooove it
i truly deeply madly like it.
i love the flow in the verses, the chorus. i want to hear it Ox!
it's really good one and i think it's part of most of our memories!! i am already singing it aloud
well done, keep it up and update us with more

Aww thankyou Ahaa glad you enjoyed it xXx <3

This is a really good song! i really dont see any problem in it! thanks for letting me read it!

Hi again!

Oh my gosh, the tune I had in my head went with this song so perfectly! It was like, a fast ballad of sorts. Anyway, I thought this song had a cool message, and the rhyming in here wasn't the least bit cheesy! I loved this!

Great job again, I can't wait to review more of your songs!

There, this one is a lot better, less awkward wording and only one typo as far as I could see (verse 4, last line "blew hopes for away," you probably meant "blew hopes FAR away"). Again, really curious as to how this would sound when sung. Good job, nice imagery!

~Blue