Young Writers Society

She works hard for the money
Always a line of men
She works hard for the money
A dick or hand is pushed in

She works hard for the money
She works hard for the ma - ma - money

She is a typical dumb fuck whore
who thinks she fits into a manly man world
The only fitting getting done is a dick in her mouth
One in her cunt and oh, oh there is one in her ass
It does not matter where the business takes her
She is always willing to lay down
(lay down!)

She works hard for the money
No respect for herself
She works hard for the money
Gave up her life and health
She works hard for the money
Always a line of pervs
She works hard for the money
Were you born to just serve?

She works hard for the money
She works hard for the ma - ma - money

She swears she is in total control
But the nightmare keeps unfolding each day and day out
She has no control over what she is doing anymore
It is becoming an addiction
She wanted to be something else but got exploited to be this
She is so stupid she does not want to quit
She says no other job can do her any better
"That is a bunch of cumdrops, you fucking dumb bitch!"
Is the prospect of money more important than your respect and health
Sure the camera seems safe, but in the end you will only be dead
Exercising dicks and getting banged and licked is not how you are supposed to be
You were made to be something better, slut
Tell me how you feel after it is over
Do you want your future daughter to do what you are doing?

She works hard for the money
Always, there is an excuse
She works hard for the money
She is more tying the noose
She works hard for the money
The camera never lies
She works hard for the money
Never sees her mom cry

She works hard for the money
You fucking slut, you selfish slut
You only care about you
You only care about yourself

She works hard for the money
You fucking slut, you selfish slut
you only care about you
You only care about yourself

She works hard for the money
She works hard for a hard on
She works hard for the money
She works hard for a hard on

She works hard for a hard on
...hard for a hard on
...hard for a hard on
...hard for your hard on

Well, that was an interesting song..or poem. Whatever it is HAHA. Either way its great in its creativity and I love it. Keep up the good work ok? I hope to read more of your work in time. Happy Writing and the bests of luck to you on whatever you are working on as of this moment.
Soulkana<3

I lol'd. What can I say.
Anyways, one part that bothered me stylistically was:

She works hard for the money
Always, there is an excuse
She works hard for the money
She is more tying the noose

Because 'Always, there is an excuse' is really awkward, and 'She is more tying the noose' just makes no sense at all. I advise spending some more time toying around with the two rhymes, or the ideas themselves, and trying to come up with something that reads a bit better.
Out of curiosity, what genre of music were you writing this for, if you had an idea?