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Ravenous Rapture



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Tue Oct 12, 2010 12:30 am
cannibalcorpse3 says...



I'm alone in a room, my mind oozing with desire,
my darkest notions come through, I exist to conspire.
To have complete dominance, to own what I prize,
to fondle and stroke free of objection and cries.

One sole aspiration brings my soul back from death,
thoughts of flesh, thoughts of passion, thoughts of harshly breathed breaths
Grasping skin firmly I shut my eyes tight,
and picture the ravaging done without a fight.

I need you to stay with me,
and never leave.
Do you know how it feels to be trapped inside me?

In death you become a one time conquest,
your icy tenderness keeps memories alive,
while my crazed exploits make sure they won't die.

Amatory sensations tingle through my whole body,
the corpse is still fresh and lying there beside me.
In death she is still and her lips have turned blue,
the delicate shade simply builds up my mood

In death you become a one time conquest,
your icy tenderness keeps memories alive,
while my crazed exploits make sure they won't die.

You can never leave my venal embrace,
just as the thoughts of your softness will never erase.
My hands crush your throat and your glassy eyes stare,
I'm panting wildly but you cannot care.

We're all alone here with no one to see,
we're isolated where it's just you and me.
And no one will know or will see what I've done,
no one could notice the thing I've become

After all that's been said and all that's been true,
there's no bigger truth than the truth that I choose:
There's nothing more that I love than to kill you.
There's nothing more that I love than to kill you.
The remainder is, An unjustifiable, egotistical, power struggle, At the expense of the American Dream.
  





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Wed Oct 20, 2010 10:09 pm
ForsakenAngel says...



Nice(: I like it!
Hakuna Matata <3
RIP to all my friends who didn’t make it.

Hop freight or get lost.
  





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Thu Mar 31, 2011 11:19 pm
dregymayfield says...



i\'m not sure why this is rated 18. But a good song nontheless
  





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Tue Apr 12, 2011 11:26 pm
cannibalcorpse3 says...



Well, this being a piece about necrophilia, I rated it for content, not so much blatant cussing or the such.
The remainder is, An unjustifiable, egotistical, power struggle, At the expense of the American Dream.
  





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Wed Apr 13, 2011 2:35 am
mcbeff says...



Ooah, this sounds like it's a good song! I like it, but it's a bit creepy (:
The only thing that really bothered me was that the spacing made it hard to read, but that's a pretty easy fix.
Good job!
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